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11:10 PM

Sure please to let me know if you need any information and if you think the above statement is enough? And how much time do you need as there is only 3 hours left.

Tonepoet

@Frrank Hmm, why do you say "our product" instead of "my product" or "your product"?

Frrank

Got it. my product it is

Tonepoet

@Frrank So it's your product, and you're bringing it to them to be worked on in a project of some sort?

Frrank

Yes

"I want to join your program because as an early stage startup this can really help me grow, the complexity of my product I need some great guidance, which I believe your program can provide.
Also my path is full with challenges your program can help me to conquer it and my product is in it self is a challenge- I like to take on a challenge; I like to rise to that challenge. I'm determine that sooner or later we will succeed in it, with your program it can be sooner" added changes

In my view the consistency of the sentences doesn't add up it's like too much nothing

Tonepoet

I want to join your program because I believe working with an early stage startup will provide me with a challenge that I would like to take on, since it will provide me with a valuable growing experience. Also, the complexity of my product needs some good guidance, which I believe your program can provide.

The path to success is filled with challenges too, which I believe your program can help me to conquer. I am determined to eventually succeed, and with with the aid of your program, I trust that success can come sooner rather than later.

How's that @Frrank

Frrank

11:23 PM

Thank you so much @Tonepoet, I can clearly see my errors and you writing make sense

Tonepoet

@Frrank Some of it is stylistic preference, but you're welcome nevertheless.

Frrank

One thing it's my startup and there program

Tonepoet

Ah, hmm...

Frrank

Where can learn to improve my stylistic preference

Tonepoet

@Frrank I'm not quite sure how to incorporate the start-up then, but I think we can at least remove the inaccuracy:

I want to join your program because I believe it will provide me with a challenge that I would like to take on, since it will provide me with a valuable growing experience. Also, the complexity of my product needs some good guidance, which I believe your program can provide.

The path to success is filled with challenges too, which I believe your program can help me to conquer. I am determined to eventually succeed, and with with the aid of your program, I trust that success can come sooner rather than later.

Frrank

11:28 PM

Great Thank you once again @Tonepoet I very much appreciate your kind help. copied and pasted

Tonepoet

@Frrank It's not exactly easy. Sometimes style guides help, but this is more about rhetoric than typography, punctuation and individual word usage. I strongly recommend reading 19th century literature.

Frrank

I hate Jane Eyre, but will definitely work on it as I need this

Tonepoet

@Frrank I don't know who that is.

Frrank

By Charlotte Bronte

now you know it

Tonepoet

@Frrank Nope! XD

But, do allow me to suggest that you read Patrick Henry's most famous speech.

Frrank

11:35 PM