Hi

could someone correct my English please:

There are many types, forms, and classifications of consciousness, and before talking about these types of species it is necessary to point out that there is a false consciousness imaginary is the set of ideas and concepts adopted by the person and convinced them, although it does not fit and correspond to the reality that lives, and there is real awareness of reality, All of them in the correct understanding of things and their origins, and the scientists restricted this

@Educ TBH it sounds like well-made Markov chains. It's the text I'd read in a post that I'd expect to be bot-generated spam. That could be because you're transliterating certain phrases and importing constructions from your native language (Arabic, right?) but they don't quite work in English

> before talking about these types of species

What does this mean? What species? I assume it doesn't refer to a group of animals

> there is a false consciousness imaginary is the set of ideas and concepts adopted by the person and convinced them

yeah you're right I translate some Arabic thought into English. no species = classification

This needs some punctuation and probably some relative pronouns

"imaginary" seems out of place, unless it's a second adjective you want to use

@M.A.R.ಠ_ಠ I'll post the whole essay

IIRC the analysis of Arabic I was taught actually literally referred to them as adjectival clauses

@Educ Noooooo, I'm about to go and study :(

جمله الوصفیه

AH I see wow, BTW are you studied Arabic ?

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@Educ Well, that depends on if having to do it as part of high school curriculum counts

@M.A.R.ಠ_ಠ Could you help me now please I wrote another essay about Consciousness

@Educ I'm trying to think of ways to suggest improvements but I think you should really rewrite it on your own, this time avoiding constructions in Arabic

I think attempts at rewording it would deviate from your intent or at least certain themes you want to apply to your writing.

It might be a good idea to read an article or two on the subject and try to adapt the sentence structures. You should be careful not to plagiarize though

Also, as appealing as they might seem, I think you should aim for brevity rather than long sentences

@M.A.R.ಠ_ಠ I'm using Grammarly to avoid plagiarize and also read a book called Consciousness a short intro

@Educ I have mixed feelings on using bots on this stuff. They have at least a few years before they're even remotely good.

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It's not a live recording, but since I'm not a chamber orchestra (I'm a piano), there won't be a better version of it anyway for many years to come.

So I might as well mention it now before it's next Friday and I get drunk again and forget that I ever wrote anything.

musescore.com/user/27897310/scores/5545711

I might put it on YouTube, but you don't check my YouTube anyway, so here's a personalized ping just from me just at you.

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@RegDwigнt Impressive!

That must be a ton of work.

It's a bit hard to judge, but there were quite a few parts that I liked.

I'd love to hear that performed by an orchestra.

@RegDwigнt Neither am I. I can blow into three win instruments, but I lack hands.