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Q: Moving story forward via conversation in first person

GurkiratBackground I wrote a few paragraphs of a story, again as an assignment a little while ago, but now I plan on completing it. But there is a problem while I am writing. Unlike other short stories that describe a shorter part of life, I want it to be like... a story, story. 'The problem' The story i...

Welcome to Writing.SE! You seem to be be asking multiple things at once; would you be able to edit this so it focuses on only a single question?
@F1Krazy if you are referring to the 'question' section then it is only one question, but I believe to have over-explained it. But if you are referring to the dialogue part then it is just a yes or no question, writing an individual question about it seems to be a waste of time of the community. Still, if you feel the same way do let me I will change it.
If the question is just, 'Can I have a long conversation in a first-person story?' then the answer is yes, but I don't see the relevance of the subject matter. Also, introverts can talk... And I don't know what 'writer's hallucination tag' means.
@DM_with_secrets The sample which I presented is a small part of a long conversation. At a certain point the dialogue tag, action, everything runs out. Since there are only 2 people, the conversation moves back and forth. I am unclear if this actually happens in books. If not then what should I do?
@DM_with_secrets Writers hallucination, consider Charles dickens (best example), many writers and people say that he would start with characters, the character would appear, and he would communicate with them thus maintaining the character's personality throughout the story. Even you must have noticed this when you are writing a story, you want a story to move a certain way, but the way you have created a character, you know he/she wouldn't do that because it's not in there nature.
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@Gurkirat First, you can do anything you want, even if no-one's done it before. Second, no matter what it is, it's almost certain someone has done it before. Third, yes, there are definitely books with long conversations between two characters. That said, why do you want "At a certain point the dialogue tag, action, everything runs out"?
@DM_with_secrets What I want to know is how can I avoid "this". I don't want a long conversation. I want to break it a little, like put some narration, but since it is in first person, breaking would seem like the character, in this case 'she' is not interested in the character. So how do I develop the character then? This new question emerges
Yeah, that would be a different question - I suspect we've got a few like that already. You can definitely still have narration in the middle of a conversation in first person - I'd suggest you look at what some of your favourite authors / books do. (I don't understand what "breaking would seem like the character" means, but I guess it's connected to your question about developing the character.)
I'm struggling to understand what you are really asking. Is it about the flow of identifying characters as they speak (in a not he said/I said way), or are you trying to break up the conversation but want it to flow naturally in a way that doesn't break character if first person?
@DWKraus yes you get me. Actually, I am asking both, before and after or.
@DWKraus if it would be much trouble can you explain it in the answer. After the 'or' part.
I actually think that WriterGeek1 did a very good job of addressing both points. As to who is speaking, I gave an answer here that mostly applies. writing.stackexchange.com/questions/53947/… although intended more as third person. To break up the conversation, give the MC's internal dialog about what is going on, descriptions of what she is seeing, doing, or wants/feels. Treat it like she's telling the events a story to an unnamed but very close confidant/confessor. First person isn't my strongest suit.
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@DWKraus I actually read your answer, but as you said, it is for 3rd person. In 3rd person, you can tell about surrounding and things. But when you are writing 1st person, restrictions comes in because you have to now consider mind and psychological of the character as well as humans. Like I replied to WriterGeek1 in an intense conversation we usually don't think about the surrounding or focus on anyone else except for the one speaking.
What I was trying to achieve, whenever the boy talks, she listen to him with her undivided attention, but at the same time being an introvert she is very nervous about all of this. And I was having a hard time establishing that.
But you guys helped a lot, and patiently. Thanks a lot.

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