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P. Vovk
P. Vovk
6:09 PM
the translation of the 3 line is just all right, as for me
 
CowperKettle
CowperKettle
The word "chill" is too informal
"mix with chosen few"? I like only the last line. I should rework it.
 
CowperKettle
CowperKettle
6:57 PM
The original stanza is beautiful. I recall it when I watch photos of my friends
 

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