why does this sound so wrong: "BC government committed to strictly monitoring work camps ..." I am writing this as a bullet point ... It doesn't have to be grammatical but it sounds incorrect with "strictly" and then "monitoring"

I feel like this should be correct: "committed to strictly monitor work camps ..."

@AIQ Is the section talking about how the resident's concerns will be fixed, or describing the concerns themselves?

Is it only the residents that are concerned?

^^ those are the sorts of things I meant -- I should have stated that more clearly

@AIQ I think either "monitor" or "monitoring" work, but "monitoring" makes me feel like the on-going nature of the task is emphasized.

I don't really like "strictly monitor" as well and I'm not sure why

Maybe it should be "committed to strict monitoring of the work camps..."

@AIQ you're aware of the mostly prescriptivist aversion to split infinitives, right?

So you have a couple of patterns here that might seem not to match, which is why you're uncomfortable with it. "commit to [gerund]" gives you fixed vibes, so to modify it there with an adverb feels off. There's also "strict monitoring of" where "monitoring" would be an NP head. You might be a bit inclined towards this pattern but you have treated it like a VP modified by an adverb, itself being a complement of "of".

I'm probably running out of terminology and talking gibberish. My point is there are many ways to reword it and that itself might make it seem unnatural but I don't think it is.