Conversation started Jul 28, 2015 at 12:13.
Damkerng T.
Damkerng T.
Jul 28, 2015 12:13
An interesting script rewrite:
Prometheus (original draft, dubbed 'Engineers'):
> THREE FIGURES walk out of the shadow.

They are men - and yet not men. Their skin is snow-white.
Their features heavy and classical - as if Rodinis Thinker
had risen from his seat. Their smooth heads are earless and
hairless. Their glittering eyes entirely black.

Against the stark land their height is impossible to judge.

They are ENGINEERS.
Prometheus (final, dubbed 'Paradise'):
> THREE FIGURES move into the foreground.

We are BEHIND them -- Moving WITH them as they walk down the
gangplank. Theyire BIG, TWELVE FEET TALL at least. SANDALED
feet SPLISH into the shallow water as we finally REVEAL --

THEY ARE MEN.

And yet... not men. Their skin is clear and WHITE... dressed
in modest clothing -- Their features CLASSICAL --
Michelangelois David come to LIFE. They are otherworldly yet
FAMILIAR. Beautiful yet DANGEROUS.

These are THE ENGINEERS.
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The last lines of the two versions deserve a closer look.
One is: They are ENGINEERS.
The other is: These are THE ENGINEERS.
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From an ELLer's point-of-view, there two important changes:
One is They was changed to These.
The other is the addition of the article THE.
Maybe they matter, maybe they don't.
How do we choose between they and these?
How do we choose between Engineers and the Engineers?
 
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