Oh, I think I'm going to write a second before I edit the first. It's rickety, but you should feel free to read it now. It should be fine if you keep in mind that it is under construction.
Hmm, maybe. But you could have ditched that part and paralleled it with Lucilia's experience. You could use that to support the transition and blurring between the two.
The wind was here too soon. The pole star was obscured by red dust. A devil hoovered to and fro on the plain.
Henry tracked it with his eyes as he fastened up his parka. He would have to get the barriers up this morning or the algae pond would be dry by nightfall.
Static crackled, then Emily’s voice buzzed tinnily in his ear. “Lunesat is tracking a storm in the Pacific basin.”
@GnomeSlice I like the dialogue. We did a dialogue only exercise one time, and I really enjoyed it. You did a good job setting a winter scene, but also conveying something of the relationship between the two people talking.
@JSBձոգչ Which one and which one? Was it cannibalism, because I almost put that in mine.
@KitFox Yeah, probably. This is the only stuff I've tried to sell though, but I wasn't really expecting anyone to pay for it, since it's 'pay what you want'. The annoying thing is that the game's release was supposed to be my advertising, but it's been months and months with no word from the development team, so I guess it died.
Oh, this is silly. I can't believe how much real life is interrupting me today. My gf now wants to have a little text chat about the holidays. WTF? Can't be bothered to talk to me for two months and now wants to be all chummy?
For the December 11 chat, we'll talk about the story Monkey on my Back. The writing exercise is three paragraphs. In the first, describe an object. In the second, describe a person. In the third, describe the interaction between the person and the object.
The Overlook Hotel
The Overlook Hotel