7:29 AM
@NeilFein: Hmmm. I'm with @RegDwightB8 about the parentheses question being non-constructive. I bow before the previously stated opinion, but I'd like to go on record: I don't see the point in migrating a question that seems plain-out poor. I don't think it creates useful content, and I don't want to be a dumping ground for vague questions on EL&U.
I really like semicolons.
Do you think semicolons make your writing more clear, or less clear?
As for the critique question, I think it's not unreasonable - he's asking for a critique of his worldbuilding process.
I did a little cleanup appropriately.
This edges kind of close to the "we don't critique content" guideline, but it's not too bad, historical value, yadda yadda yadda.